12-10-2013, 01:20 PM
In S1, did you mean for sigh to be its own line?
I would amend the third stanza like so:
As balls and lights and silver garlands
fill the lonely gaps, he wonders,
"Why bother, when four walls enclose the secret
and not even the window lets out a peep?"
In S4, are you sure you mean reminiscent? Seems an odd word choice to me.
Anyway, I very much enjoyed this poem. It seems to me that it's about a man trying futilely to keep up appearances during the holidays following the death of his wife; is that right?
I would amend the third stanza like so:
As balls and lights and silver garlands
fill the lonely gaps, he wonders,
"Why bother, when four walls enclose the secret
and not even the window lets out a peep?"
In S4, are you sure you mean reminiscent? Seems an odd word choice to me.
Anyway, I very much enjoyed this poem. It seems to me that it's about a man trying futilely to keep up appearances during the holidays following the death of his wife; is that right?