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(12-09-2013, 12:42 PM)Speaktaboo Wrote:  She could pull a smile out of the mouth of hell. Pretty interesting, nice
I had never seen dead sunflowers printed on a dress.
I watched her, Skipping moss covered stones in a dry lake;
chasing butterflies around bodies unburied.
She was the last of them.
The last of us.
It had been eleven days since she'd eaten
A mug half filled with water on her last day she looked back on the wars.
I think she was 11 or 12.
11. So far this style unique to me, I don't think I'm fully comprehending everything but I have a good idea.
Infantries and investors.
Doctors, scientists, the churches.
The ones we dont see, the inbetween. Don't
She was inbetween.
Now she was the only.
before she got too weak she would play and play. Before
She was never afraid.
Never cried.
She didnt even drink the water
Now I get more of the content here, good message. Just made a few comments, and couple capitalizations and grammar corrections.
I never highlight my flaws or deficits
Because none of that will matter when death visits
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11. - by Speaktaboo - 12-09-2013, 12:42 PM
RE: 11. - by Polar Bear - 12-09-2013, 04:08 PM
RE: 11. - by Speaktaboo - 12-09-2013, 05:05 PM
RE: 11. - by 71degrees - 12-10-2013, 12:42 AM
RE: 11. - by beaufort - 12-10-2013, 03:32 AM
RE: 11. - by Malu - 12-10-2013, 03:49 AM
RE: 11. - by Speaktaboo - 12-10-2013, 03:57 AM
RE: 11. - by justcloudy - 12-10-2013, 08:26 AM
RE: 11. - by Speaktaboo - 12-10-2013, 08:53 AM



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