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Water Jar

HalfOpenArms Offline

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12-07-2013, 02:43 PM

I'd like to echo what the above commenters have said: Beautiful poem, awkward punctuation!!!

As for the repetition of the "rushing" line, I like it. I vote that you keep it as is.

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Water Jar - by brokenprism - 12-06-2013, 03:39 PM

RE: Water Jar - by nuclearwastemisshap - 12-07-2013, 01:49 AM

RE: Water Jar - by No1wouldriotforless - 12-07-2013, 09:23 AM

RE: Water Jar - by ellajam - 12-07-2013, 10:11 AM

RE: Water Jar - by HalfOpenArms - 12-07-2013, 02:43 PM

RE: Water Jar - by crow - 12-07-2013, 05:14 PM

RE: Water Jar - by trueenigma - 12-16-2013, 10:51 AM

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