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Struck By Lightning
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12-07-2013, 01:03 PM
I really don't want to sound dismissive of a person's work.... but, I'm going to say it: this poem sounds like subtitles to a Japanese video game. All that I like here is the concept. I think the "introspection" and finding one's self concept can work.... but it needs some conduit aspect to aide that 'quest' for self.... otherwise it's uninteresting/undefined. I can't figure out how to rework said concept into language that is not overused. Sorry!
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Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-06-2013, 02:10 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by tectak - 12-06-2013, 05:51 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-06-2013, 06:05 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by tectak - 12-06-2013, 10:56 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-06-2013, 11:44 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Todd - 12-06-2013, 11:48 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-06-2013, 11:55 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by tectak - 12-07-2013, 12:42 AM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-07-2013, 12:44 AM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-07-2013, 06:49 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by ThePinsir - 12-06-2013, 11:32 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by beaufort - 12-07-2013, 10:31 AM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Bemh - 12-07-2013, 11:09 AM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by No1wouldriotforless - 12-07-2013, 01:03 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by billy - 12-08-2013, 12:11 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by 71degrees - 12-08-2013, 12:41 PM
RE: Struck By Lightning - by Simatong - 12-08-2013, 10:33 PM
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