12-07-2013, 08:50 AM
I understood this poem as a voiced mission statement by an "older" contrarian to the younger crowd. AKA: what I would like to scream at every scraggly-bearded, corduroy wearing 20'sum on a fixed-gear.
I like it-- it's simplicity. Personally, it made me ache for some word like "resign" near the ending bits. "or resign yourself to silence."
I wanted this precisely BECAUSE the poem is nostalgic in its address of "future" contrarians..... it begs for some "remorse" or "giving up or giving in" or "don't fade out" moment.
The only other hang up was the length of the line including "never" and I don't suggest 'n'er' to writers.... so I wouldn't know what to do about the line.
I liked it. I'd like to drink a beer and read it off in a bar..... that sort of thing. Cheers.
I like it-- it's simplicity. Personally, it made me ache for some word like "resign" near the ending bits. "or resign yourself to silence."
I wanted this precisely BECAUSE the poem is nostalgic in its address of "future" contrarians..... it begs for some "remorse" or "giving up or giving in" or "don't fade out" moment.
The only other hang up was the length of the line including "never" and I don't suggest 'n'er' to writers.... so I wouldn't know what to do about the line.
I liked it. I'd like to drink a beer and read it off in a bar..... that sort of thing. Cheers.