11-29-2013, 12:31 PM
Hey mungoman,
I think you should read THE ROAD By Cormac McCarthy. Also cut this down to bare bones and make each line count. Watch the redundancy and go easy on your descriptors.
perhaps start with something like this:
Turning from the city gate he flees,
A bedroll strapped to his pack,
behind him....ect... ect...
Good luck,
Chazz
I think you should read THE ROAD By Cormac McCarthy. Also cut this down to bare bones and make each line count. Watch the redundancy and go easy on your descriptors.
perhaps start with something like this:
Turning from the city gate he flees,
A bedroll strapped to his pack,
behind him....ect... ect...
Good luck,
Chazz