Fighting life, edit 2

Fighting life, edit 2

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11-29-2013, 08:42 AM

Lovely suggestions Tom, esp the stumble/clamber switch, that's genius.

Thanks much for the comments! =]

-justcloudy

OK edit posted. I think the language flows better now but I feel like I'm forcing the rhythm now. Not sure. Thoughts?

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Fighting life, edit 2 - by justcloudy - 11-26-2013, 06:16 AM

RE: Fighting life - by justcloudy - 11-27-2013, 08:05 AM

RE: Fighting life - by rowens - 11-28-2013, 09:31 AM

RE: Fighting life - by justcloudy - 11-29-2013, 05:42 AM

RE: Fighting life - by tomoffing - 11-29-2013, 08:29 AM

RE: Fighting life - by justcloudy - 11-29-2013, 08:42 AM

RE: Fighting life - by tomoffing - 11-29-2013, 10:07 AM

RE: Fighting life - by justcloudy - 11-30-2013, 03:00 AM

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