Homidae Contra Poseidus

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They'd thought they could sail the seven saltiest seas They'd feels odd to me, I guess its "they had" so its putting us in the past but idk idk not sure how I feel about they'd
but they sailed straight to hell; they wander aimlessly
for up went the froth, and dance did the waves
as swam did the sailors down deep to their graves Nice images here but the backwards syntax and language feels needlesly archaic, but thats just my opinion

Poseidon had pulled up the porcelain plug
he'd sent it to smash all their submarine subs. before this line I imagined the poem was taking place in the 18th century, submarines makes it feel a lot more modern but that contradicts the archaic language a bit. That and "submarine subs" feels like its stretching for the rhyme just because "submarines" would have said that same thing I think?
So that man did retreat but still secretly spoke
as he knelt by it's feet in hushed tones of hope

of the glorious day that he'd tackle this goat
and the glorious way that he'd slit out his throat > . > I like this image, poor goat
and how he would ride under skies open wide
through all of the moats of the seven saltiest seas.

Nice little tale here in your poem. It almost feels like a song because of the rhymes, I imagine sailors singing this in a pub. Jmho jmho thnx for sharing