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Pain and Beauty
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11-28-2013, 09:13 AM
To me, it just seems like there's too much other subject matter. The poem could stand out more, and be more profound if it had less. Remember less is more, and you could understand it better if there was less extra information. Try to make it more to the point, and it will flow better.
All in all I do like this poem, it just seems like a little much. |
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Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 11-26-2013, 09:27 PM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by rowens - 11-28-2013, 07:48 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by Glittercake - 11-28-2013, 09:13 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 11-30-2013, 12:13 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by rowens - 11-30-2013, 02:52 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by ellajam - 11-30-2013, 03:18 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 12-02-2013, 09:35 AM
RE: Pain and Beauty - by billy - 12-02-2013, 09:47 AM
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