Pain and Beauty

Pain and Beauty

rowens
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11-28-2013, 07:48 AM

You have a lot of ideas, and they could all work in one poem. This poem could work, but it doesn't. There's just too much of something. Too much drivel, I think. Cut back on some of that and the whole poem might work a little better.

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Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 11-26-2013, 09:27 PM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by rowens - 11-28-2013, 07:48 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by Glittercake - 11-28-2013, 09:13 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 11-30-2013, 12:13 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by rowens - 11-30-2013, 02:52 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by ellajam - 11-30-2013, 03:18 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by Mikeodial - 12-02-2013, 09:35 AM

RE: Pain and Beauty - by billy - 12-02-2013, 09:47 AM

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