Underneath
#5
(11-27-2013, 07:20 AM)killthepoet Wrote:  You wear the greatest of 
Disguises

To the congregation 

You appear the lamb

Laying upon the stone alter

A symbol of sacrifice.


But you are the priest

With a cold blade

In your hand

"For with this you shall be healed" you say

Why must I repent?

How hath I sinned?


Let the blood drip at your feet

Remove your robes

And allow them to see

The heartless reaper 

Underneath
Lots of questioning here. Is the intent to lead the reader to a conclusion or to question themselves?

Seems to oscillate between a personal opinion on the matter and then leaving it open for the reader. Perhaps it might be better served doing one or the other?

Is it the disguise to be exposed or the intent of the priest? Or someone intending to the be priest?
Reply


Messages In This Thread
Underneath - by killthepoet - 11-27-2013, 07:20 AM
RE: Underneath - by cidermaid - 11-27-2013, 05:50 PM
RE: Underneath - by Viktor Vaughn - 11-27-2013, 05:53 PM
RE: Underneath - by tectak - 11-27-2013, 09:49 PM
RE: Underneath - by Mikeodial - 11-28-2013, 03:07 AM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!