11-27-2013, 08:05 AM
Hey Chazz, thanks for your comments.
S1 L3-4 are talking about soldiers (or anyone really) who leave destruction in their paths, but as a result become distraught themselves. Wrecking the lives of others wrecks their own as well. I'm disappointed that wasn't clearer, I'll think on that, thanks for pointing out that you had a problem with it.
I knew someone would mention all the "they"s but I seriously, honestly cannot figure out how to take them out without totally restructuring the stanza. But maybe that's what's called for.
And yes I fought with that last line for a long time. I'll revisit.
'Preciate your time! Thanks!
-justcloudy
S1 L3-4 are talking about soldiers (or anyone really) who leave destruction in their paths, but as a result become distraught themselves. Wrecking the lives of others wrecks their own as well. I'm disappointed that wasn't clearer, I'll think on that, thanks for pointing out that you had a problem with it.
I knew someone would mention all the "they"s but I seriously, honestly cannot figure out how to take them out without totally restructuring the stanza. But maybe that's what's called for.
And yes I fought with that last line for a long time. I'll revisit.
'Preciate your time! Thanks!
-justcloudy
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