Susceptible to change

[tectak]

Edit tectak it was then heslopian

Young enough to notice change,
she softened the moment
with milk-washed skin,
defined by her perfect silhouette.

I hid this creature rather well,
buried beneath storyboard Beanos,
angry looks and desperate Dandys.
My eyes now opened in a primeval light,
reality catches me brutal as a dog bite.

Cheeks first reddened by rushed mouths
are held in trembling hands.
Our snakes begin to slither and roam.
Medusa smiles as she turns me to stone.





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Young enough to notice
for the first time,
so soft and smooth the moment.
Caught on clarities torn veil,
drawn towards perfect features,
melting critic to a masterpiece.
A creature well hidden till now,
buried beneath story board Beano’s,
angry looks and desperate Dandy’s.
Eyes open primeval,
reveals a change dog bite brutal.
Standing hillside looking back
breathless,
I think to brush pure beauty,
reddened by rushed mouths,
alive my writhing needs,
taking tingles under your touch.

Brilliant! Why didn't you write this the first time?
Best,
tectak