11-27-2013, 12:39 AM
Thanks for all the replies!
Yes, I am in general agreement across the board - working with line-breaks and the meter to develop a more readable rhythm, more study of those topics in order also (one can never have too much study).
This was one of the more 'ripe' poems, and I wanted to just let it get out there before I took the editor's knife, but now that it's settled a day or so I think I can do so without being too ham-handed, especially with your help. Thanks!
Yes, I am in general agreement across the board - working with line-breaks and the meter to develop a more readable rhythm, more study of those topics in order also (one can never have too much study).
This was one of the more 'ripe' poems, and I wanted to just let it get out there before I took the editor's knife, but now that it's settled a day or so I think I can do so without being too ham-handed, especially with your help. Thanks!