What Remains

[Glittercake]

I like this poem because it shows how you are dealing with death and still projecting your misunderstood relationship with him in a feasible way. It flows well from where tigrflye said the real poem starts, but before that it just sounds like a interesting back story before the real show begins. But as I said I like it, my only thought is that you should separate the two ideas with a simple
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Space.