11-23-2013, 07:10 AM
Dad
You wanted me to be a Dr. I would write out "doctor"
I agreed
but really
I wanted to be a writer.
I sat there staring out the window
Looking for your car.
I had my favorite outfit on
I even drew a picture of us together. "and a picture of us together"
He said he was coming almost 3 hours ago would omit "almost"
We were supposed to go to the park.
I heard my mother on the phone in the other room would omit "in the other room"
trying to muffle her voice,
"You told him you were fucking coming!"
He's coming.
I know it.
I wonder what he looks like now.
I can't wait to tell him about school. would say "about my school"
I bet he remembered my birthday present this time. would substitute "year" for "time"
So now I'm writing
Poems, not prescriptions.
And I remember you told me once,
"You can be anything you want to be"
Why didn't you want to be my dad?
How about:
So now I'm writing poems,
not prescriptions.
I remember you once told me,
"You can be anything you want".
Why didn't you want to be my dad?
Just suggestions - this is emotionally engaging and I am sure many readers will be able to identify with the theme of lingering sadness/anger. Enjoyed reading - thanks!
You wanted me to be a Dr. I would write out "doctor"
I agreed
but really
I wanted to be a writer.
I sat there staring out the window
Looking for your car.
I had my favorite outfit on
I even drew a picture of us together. "and a picture of us together"
He said he was coming almost 3 hours ago would omit "almost"
We were supposed to go to the park.
I heard my mother on the phone in the other room would omit "in the other room"
trying to muffle her voice,
"You told him you were fucking coming!"
He's coming.
I know it.
I wonder what he looks like now.
I can't wait to tell him about school. would say "about my school"
I bet he remembered my birthday present this time. would substitute "year" for "time"
So now I'm writing
Poems, not prescriptions.
And I remember you told me once,
"You can be anything you want to be"
Why didn't you want to be my dad?
How about:
So now I'm writing poems,
not prescriptions.
I remember you once told me,
"You can be anything you want".
Why didn't you want to be my dad?
Just suggestions - this is emotionally engaging and I am sure many readers will be able to identify with the theme of lingering sadness/anger. Enjoyed reading - thanks!