"I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed"
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even in dreams, you turn me down

Wow, what a haunting line. It tells a story and has so much emotion in such few words.
Criticism is the same as most, something about that living line throws off the flow to me.
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"I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by alatos - 11-17-2013, 11:21 PM
RE: "I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by milo - 11-18-2013, 01:28 AM
RE: "I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by alatos - 11-19-2013, 02:50 AM
RE: "I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by justcloudy - 11-19-2013, 08:21 AM
RE: "I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by killthepoet - 11-21-2013, 06:54 AM
RE: "I Plummet, As I Lie in Bed" - by alatos - 11-21-2013, 11:29 PM



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