11-19-2013, 02:10 AM
tigrflye- thanks for your comments. I am changing the original (which exists on paper) to incorporate some of them. I do believe you get what I was trying to show with this poem. Thanks again.
justcloudy- for the moment I am editing my paper bound originals to employ various suggestions. Thanks for your help.
Graystar- "why terminated" After the body you are in (presuming your gender to be male) passes sixty years of life I believe this question will be answered more eloquently than I ever could with a few typed words transmitted via the internet. Thanks for your suggestions. As I said in previous responses to others I (for now) am making any changes on paper. Glad you enjoyed this little ditty. I never see two gamboling butterflies without watching my mind drift towards them on the spirit of this piece.
justcloudy- for the moment I am editing my paper bound originals to employ various suggestions. Thanks for your help.
Graystar- "why terminated" After the body you are in (presuming your gender to be male) passes sixty years of life I believe this question will be answered more eloquently than I ever could with a few typed words transmitted via the internet. Thanks for your suggestions. As I said in previous responses to others I (for now) am making any changes on paper. Glad you enjoyed this little ditty. I never see two gamboling butterflies without watching my mind drift towards them on the spirit of this piece.