Beaten Path

[tomoffing]

I agree with the comments that certain lines could be tightened, but I'm enjoy the elongated final line in each stanza. I think it adds to the drawn out or repetitive aspects of the cycle I think you're describing. Perhaps try to strike a consistent meter with each of these last lines. Could work well with more of an echo.

Really enjoyed the carousel imagery in the third stanza too.

Thanks a lot overall, this is great to read.