Beaten Path

[lachaser33]

Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Spoons.

Beaten Path

Dawn breaks,
My body shakes,
I miss your burning touch,
Come back to me,
And set me free,
No longer can I exist without my one and only crutch. -a little wordy

Gone now,
Can't remember how,
We started down this lonely path.
Hand in hand,
We walk this land,
In the shadows with a hollow laugh. -i like this image

Leave home,
I'm all alone,
I struggle to face the day,
No one knows,
How my carousel goes,
But it only goes one way.

Back again,
Find my friend,
You've hidden all day long,
Now I'm here,
You hide my fear,
And from my reach you cast it far beyond.

Body cold,
Have my soul,
Take me to a happy place,
Head starts drumming,
Your touch is numbing,
Please fill this empty space.

Body warm,
A violent storm, -not sure what this means
Quickly tomorrow come again,
I'm all your's, you're all mine,
I'll waste my time.
Rinse. Repeat. Until my end. -i like this ending

I like how the rhyme pattern stays the same throughout and how the first line of each stanza has only 2 words. It gives your poem a very rhythmic feeling.