11-13-2013, 06:39 AM
Thanks all for the comments and suggestions!
Todd, honestly I tend to agree with you. I was already considering cutting it down to just the first strophe and leaving it at that. But short poems make me nervous. ;p
I've been working on the second strophe in my head all day. We'll see what ends up tumbling out.
-justcloudy
PS Heslopian I generally hate "soul" too, but couldn't think of anything else. Will play with it.
Todd, honestly I tend to agree with you. I was already considering cutting it down to just the first strophe and leaving it at that. But short poems make me nervous. ;p
I've been working on the second strophe in my head all day. We'll see what ends up tumbling out.
-justcloudy
PS Heslopian I generally hate "soul" too, but couldn't think of anything else. Will play with it.
_______________________________________
The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.