Alone, yet Surrounded
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I speak to my self - myself
knowing that the zombies
are just like everybody else - how so ?

I sit quietly observing - Why?
the people surrounding me
not knowing - what ?

sickened by evil
who am i to turn to
i hate the deceitful

realizing that i am my own pupil - How is this connected with the first 2 stanzas ?
I found my savior
and in returned showed me to his people

for I was never truly alone
I had God
Goodbye evil

Should probably add some rhythm to it, it doesn't really flow when reading your poem...
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Alone, yet Surrounded - by bpwill23 - 07-19-2013, 01:15 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by Malu - 10-18-2013, 08:32 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by Viktor Vaughn - 10-18-2013, 05:44 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by tigrflye - 10-18-2013, 08:24 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by SirBrendan - 10-19-2013, 12:13 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by ThePinsir - 10-23-2013, 12:57 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by drithebee - 10-30-2013, 07:33 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by Blunt - 11-01-2013, 12:47 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by Stephanie - 11-02-2013, 08:40 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by rowens - 11-03-2013, 06:47 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by MpoemsR - 11-03-2013, 03:53 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by alatos - 11-11-2013, 04:09 AM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by aaa1993 - 11-12-2013, 03:21 PM
RE: Alone, yet Surrounded - by beaufort - 11-12-2013, 08:52 PM



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