Hey thanks milo, I'll look at the lines. I loved all those exercises these came from, and am looking forward to April again.
I agree with your _____ of ______ comment. 99.999% of the time they can be done better. They're like bubonic rats in the way they slip in.
I like some of the condensing you did especially the "as" and the "will" in the final line: It lends some confidence to the assertion. I know I'll keep that.
Thanks again,
Todd
I agree with your _____ of ______ comment. 99.999% of the time they can be done better. They're like bubonic rats in the way they slip in.
I like some of the condensing you did especially the "as" and the "will" in the final line: It lends some confidence to the assertion. I know I'll keep that.
Thanks again,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson