twilight
#3
I like this a lot. The only suggestion I can think of is to keep the last stanza 3 lines -

"curls back
on herself
whispering to the bee"

Either way sounds good to me - very nice!
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twilight - by emerald13 - 10-28-2013, 02:29 PM
RE: twilight - by ChristopherSea - 10-28-2013, 07:04 PM
RE: twilight - by beaufort - 11-09-2013, 03:14 AM
RE: twilight - by paul.rosen - 11-09-2013, 03:13 PM
RE: twilight - by trailertrash - 12-09-2013, 08:34 AM



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