Homesick

[jdvanwijk]

Thanks for your comment! This wasn't intended as a haiku, more as a free-form short poem. I agree with your first two edits though; the 'and' I'm not sure about yet, without it, the poem feels a bit too terse for me.

I know next to nothing about Haikus, but this seems a little wordy to me. If you get rid of "it's" and "that" it would be stronger. Maybe the "and" in the last line too?

That being said, I love the thought, the image. It's the truth too.