Two for Alice by ellajam

[ChristopherSea]

yeah, some solid edits. i followed the thread though i didn't give feedback on all the edits. good choice milo

i will reply to a question marcella asked. the tanka 57577 form and would straying from it wreck the/a poem. my answer is; i don't think it would like haiku the syl count is only a guideline.

I'm glad I stuck with it here, I think it provides an underlying skeleton for the poem to rest on that appeals to the reader. It also helped to maintain the original energy of the poem through edits. Yep, that explains it, tanka magic.

I learned so much through this edit; the credit for a satisfying end goes to all of you here who have been so clear and patient with me. Thanks for the generous gifts of your time, expertise and willingness to voice your opinions.

It was your insistence on leaving in 'same' that made the poem. Nice!/Chris