11-06-2013, 07:11 PM
Thanks Billy! It was meant to be beneath not between in that line, maybe an autocorrect there or just me being an ejit.
This has been really good. I was too close to it to move forward. I felt really muddled which is interesting because now that I re-read it with your comments I can see how muddled the piece also is. Muddled mind, muddled poem. Perhaps I posted it too soon but it's been really helpful to get this feedback to move me forward.
I should add Brendan that I do want to learn about metre, I just don't have any clue about it at this stage. On the list of things to do, thank you!
This has been really good. I was too close to it to move forward. I felt really muddled which is interesting because now that I re-read it with your comments I can see how muddled the piece also is. Muddled mind, muddled poem. Perhaps I posted it too soon but it's been really helpful to get this feedback to move me forward.
I should add Brendan that I do want to learn about metre, I just don't have any clue about it at this stage. On the list of things to do, thank you!