a bee (haiku)

[Magpie]

a bee
backs into another
purple echium

©Gina

Hi Gina, I like your Haiku even though I didn't know what an Echium was until I looked it up. But that's one of the things I like about poetry, when I learn new words.
The only thing I would say, although I keep on changing my mind, but I think it may benefit from dropping "another" in the sense that it gives it a shorter time frame so that it is more of an instant snapshot which I think is more powerful. But either way I would still be interested in what your thoughts were about it. I'm haiku crazy at the moment, I love it. Thanks for the read.
Mark