Tonight his lover is sick of him

[ellajam]

Hi, Gina, welcome.

Well this poem leaves a bad taste in my mouth every time, so if that was your goal, success. No one gets any respect here.

While punctuation is not my forte, you've gone half way here and I think it would enhance the poem if you add the rest.

Here are a few notes.

Tonight his lover is sick of him
so he spends
the night with HER I might go instead with her or Her

She has learned her shape
setting out his dinner and a beer
He sprawls in homely layers
talking with his mouth full

there is no pretense
no interest in her day possibly "of" instead of "no"

..... so relaxing
to be loved by a wife.

©Gina