The Line

[tigrflye]

See how the poem is instantly more readable and lighter without changing a single word? Now the trick is to see if you can examine your end words and try to build double meanings, suggestion, irony, tension and focus. Good luck.

Thanks Milo,
So, yes, I should stick with the more precise pattern. And I guess it's ok to break in the middle of a foot.. seems you defaulted the word to the first line instead of the 2nd.

My jaw unhinged. I thought my bulging
eyes could take no more.

I appreciate it. I'll be studying the end words...
And singing Gilligan's Island all night.

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And my husbands singing back up.. "attack the flimsy hem"..