Ship of Fools
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(10-26-2013, 04:55 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  
(10-25-2013, 04:31 AM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures
Excellent short poem. The only thing that threw me was the "Dope" reference, which where I am from always refers to hashish, but seemingly it can refer to any drug but mostly of golden brown variety. Nice wordplay with vein. No crit to offer, it's perfect as it is.
Thanks,
Mark
Thanks Mark for appreciating and commenting on the poem! According to Merriam-Webster, Dope is 'an illegal drug (such as marijuana or herion)' and 'a stupid or annoying person', so I was going for the double entendre as I was with vein/vain. Cheers/Chris Smile
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Messages In This Thread
Ship of Fools - by ChristopherSea - 10-25-2013, 04:31 AM
RE: Ship of Fools - by Douglaspocock - 10-25-2013, 05:53 PM
RE: Ship of Fools - by ChristopherSea - 10-25-2013, 06:41 PM
RE: Ship of Fools - by Magpie - 10-26-2013, 04:55 AM
RE: Ship of Fools - by ChristopherSea - 10-26-2013, 05:07 AM
RE: Ship of Fools - by emerald13 - 10-27-2013, 07:54 AM
RE: Ship of Fools - by billy - 10-27-2013, 11:03 AM
RE: Ship of Fools - by ChristopherSea - 10-28-2013, 12:12 AM



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