10-23-2013, 09:33 AM
i like what you have so far but it needs more. at present it reads like a list
use some connectors or juxtapose some of the ideas with others.
use some connectors or juxtapose some of the ideas with others.
(10-22-2013, 07:59 AM)Legoloofa Wrote: I like to imagine versions of me within a world that couldn't possibly exist.
Folding books into skulls
leaving eyeprints on ceilings
injecting trees into bloodstreams
carving pennies out of scotch
jumping into pockets of neon light
feeding orphans white glue
watching stones decay
holding street lights with broken finger nails
watering Gods video games.
