Idleness

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I agree with billy on this one there js a forced feeling, but not because its nit there but ur letting the ink flow , not ur mind. Just think river and us crituqe as gators, take that emotion to this poem as we (the outside looking in) "don't understand" don't tell us show us! Good conceptually but basic, go deep what's underneath the gators what do the gators see u as what is ur boat made of speex of the stream? N if u notice those questions u can also ask ur self in refrence in life which will develop this idea to length s where u think someone else wrote it