10-21-2013, 09:35 AM
(10-09-2013, 04:57 PM)DontBelong Wrote: So I have literally no idea what a poem actually is or how to make this into one if it's not already (I'll learn dammit it I swear) but I like what you wrote.It's a metaphor of sorts that compares to the good tasty sugary stuff trees produce when they're really healthy, which enriches them in essential nutrients to grow. I feel our happiness compares to that.
The line "It’s unsettling that I’m scared to leak sap of my own bliss, it’s been so long, what if it doesn’t exist?" seems odd though. Why Sap?
