10-20-2013, 04:02 AM
(10-19-2013, 03:38 AM)Keith Wrote: The drawn in night NiceNot much to critique here. This is a vey nice warm-hearted poem
shudders me home.
Chapped hands,
too tense to tilt I enjoyed this alliteration, it reads fine, but very slightly awkward.
large coat buttons.
Stocking toes suckle
under her warm belly,
like nuzzling puppies.
I'm thinking this is about a new member of your family, or one that has been a part of it for a while. Thanks for the good read 
I never highlight my flaws or deficits
Because none of that will matter when death visits
Because none of that will matter when death visits