Life On Rapids

[Malu]

Going down a river, Water smashing against rock, Why is "Water" capitalized? When all it did was follow a comma. And water smashing on rocks, that's probably not the image everyone gets from thinking of rapids, oh wait it kind of is. If this is "Life on Rapids" I would think that it would be a more important hobby or aspect of your life, give a more personal description. What does that water look like to you? What does it make you feel?
Nowhere to turn to, But only downstream Same thing here, "But" capitalized after a comma, why? And I can imagine there is only one way to go in rapids, the second part of this line doesn't need to be mentioned for us to still know where you're headed.
Into Chaos. I don't think "Chaos" needs to be capitalized, or even stated. Rapids are pretty chaotic in nature, so why state the obvious.

My boat tossed back and forth, My paddle nearly snapped, "My" shouldn't be capitalized after a comma.
Into the white foam I go, Not knowing if I’ll come back. Again, don't capitalize after the comma. And white foam is extremely generic and uncreative.
I go all about, twist, turns and all,
Nowhere else to turn to, You go all about twist and turns, only to have nowhere else to turn to. Interesting.
But only inside, Where optimism still lies, Again with the capitalization after a comma. I'm starting to think you get commas confused with periods, or at least have no idea what a comma is.
And where dreams seem to prosper.

Hope is all I cling to, and endurance keeps me free,
For if I give up now, my dreams will be smashed
Into Smithereens. Yes, a stanza with no capitalizations after a comma! However, I don't think you need to capitalize smithereens, which is also a generic word for this.

Past all the obstacles I go, Freedom in my grasp. I knew it couldn't be over, why is "Freedom" capitalized? After a comma!
The trial is now over, but I still can not relax, can't instead of "can not" would read better.
For life on rapids is not easy, But only challenges to be held, Yay, more incorrect capitalization after a comma.
Rewarded with only achievement, Which is worth more than gold itself. And of course the last line proves to be like the rest of the poem.

If you couldn't tell by my bold comments, seeing the same error in a lot of lines is irritating. I tried to give you the benefit of the doubt by thinking those words were capitalized for emphasis, but some of those words are "which, but, my, where, not" so there goes that. The imagery was nothing new, which leads to the other issue I had. Which is that any novice to master whitewater river rafter, or whatever title you want, could have written this. Probably someone who just sat on the banks of the river could have written this. Someone who grew up in a desert could have written this. What I'm saying is that there wasn't any personal connection to this activity. I didn't get any sense of what you felt or what river rafting does for you. If this really is "Life on Rapids" it should have much more personal connections and meanings. I didn't see anything that made this your poem, this doesn't have much of a difference from other poems written about this activity, or at least no differences from the generic ones.