Hallelujah

[Malu]

i would love to believe I
find you crossing my path These first two lines don't read very well together.
stand by my side when i'm alone I'm
walk with me on my journey
follow me down this long road Of course the road is long, when is it ever short? This can be strengthened with better vocabulary for better imagery.

when i see sunset i see only sky Both times, capitalize "i" and "when i see sunset i see" I think it should be sunsets.
in nature i see only miles to walk I
a swinging cross on a windscreen "miles to walk" but you're in car now. Interesting.
bible unread in a hotel room went from the car to the hotel, not very smoothly.
preacher shouting in the street

now the days are long
the night fades into daylight
my body is strong How strong?
the soul is weak How weak? Don't just tell us, show us.
lost in every place i visit I

was there a time i did believe I
when i was a kid in the street I
schooldays and morning mass
religious education class
i listened and wondered I

time has passed
life's journey as set me aside
ive cried and wished so hard I've, and how hard?
that you were really there
I often sing quietly to hallelujah you sing to the song?
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This seemed rush, with almost zero attention to capitalizing the word I. The first two stanzas had some imagery, but the third barely did and the last two could use some as well.