10-17-2013, 03:24 PM
I am attempting to add punctuation to my poems which were written without it.
After weeding out unneeded words, all the ands and buts are gone, so now I end up with a wall of commas.
example:
Half glassed for winter,
half screened to catch summer's breeze,
your home sang your soul,
cradled it during your stay,
released it to soar in joy.
Not a pretty sight.
Maybe the solution is not to add punctuation, but to make sure the poem is clear straight through without it. It almost feels like a cheat, clearing up confusion with little marks instead of better lines.
I'm torn.
After weeding out unneeded words, all the ands and buts are gone, so now I end up with a wall of commas.
example:
Half glassed for winter,
half screened to catch summer's breeze,
your home sang your soul,
cradled it during your stay,
released it to soar in joy.
Not a pretty sight.
Maybe the solution is not to add punctuation, but to make sure the poem is clear straight through without it. It almost feels like a cheat, clearing up confusion with little marks instead of better lines.
I'm torn.
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