10-16-2013, 02:38 AM
I like this one it has good rhythm and the rhymes arent too forced, they flow with the piece very well. the ending is a tiny bit confusing due to the way the rest of it goes, it is like the rest of it is speaking to mankind to be proud of their labors then it gets to where you keep them wanting more, It might be just a thing of taste or I might not be getting it but it feels slightly confusing,