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Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :)
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10-09-2013, 04:57 PM
So I have literally no idea what a poem actually is or how to make this into one if it's not already (I'll learn dammit it I swear) but I like what you wrote.
The line "It’s unsettling that I’m scared to leak sap of my own bliss, it’s been so long, what if it doesn’t exist?" seems odd though. Why Sap? |
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Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by Legoloofa - 10-07-2013, 01:45 PM
RE: Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by Leanne - 10-07-2013, 02:13 PM
RE: Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by billy - 10-07-2013, 02:26 PM
RE: Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by Legoloofa - 10-08-2013, 03:06 AM
RE: Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by DontBelong - 10-09-2013, 04:57 PM
RE: Spilled thoughts, would love some feedback :) - by Legoloofa - 10-21-2013, 09:35 AM
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