Sharon Frost

[heslopian]

Pale, smooth, unblemished skin
Thin, straight nose line
Smiling, cupids bow lips "Cupid's"

Hair so blonde it was almost white Good descriptor.
Blue eyes, not piercing, happy, kind

She invited me to her house

There was a problem with the
cupboard hinge

'Could I fix it?'

I didn't know how

Told her and her mother
'I was sorry'

Went home,
never went back

Always felt
I left something there
Intangible, irretrievable


We were 14 that year


Now, 60 days from 56th birthday,
it seems it happened
last week


Always act from the heart, pardner


What you do
never
leaves you

Due to the poem's loose structure I'd recommend replacing every comma with a line break; it will flow better this way, because unless your poem has longer lines and more consistent pauses punctuation just slows it down to a list of bullet points. IMHO, anyway.
I like the seeming innocuousness of this poem; it's so spare and about such a trivial incident that you think, at first, that it's about nothing, but then its insight dawns. That's quite a clever way to write a piece. Thank you for the read