Spaceopath

[dontwantusername]

Hi, thanks for the comment.
Well the poem isn't a commentary on poetry writing, so I guess the answer to the question you asked is: no.
However, I did feel that it worked.

I think it's interesting how my intuition led me to writing the lines:
"the sharpness of dark,
and the ubiquity of light.
Both of those fit."

I can imagine actually that those lines might be out of place. But I can't see it with the rest of the poem, unless you're referring to the last verse. Yeah, it is actually different to the rest of the poem.

Thanks again.