09-30-2013, 12:01 PM
el,
A suggestion on the last part to make the shift clearer.
Listening closely,
we hope not to hear
the roar of giants unbounded.
Also. "Unbounded" works better here I think, both in definition and as an adjective.
I do like the idea and the personification, but I have always been a sucker for elementalism.
Dale
A suggestion on the last part to make the shift clearer.
Listening closely,
we hope not to hear
the roar of giants unbounded.
Also. "Unbounded" works better here I think, both in definition and as an adjective.
I do like the idea and the personification, but I have always been a sucker for elementalism.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.