Sharon Frost

[Wjames]

Pale, smooth, unblemished skin
Thin, straight nose line
Smiling, cupids bow lips


Hair so blonde it was almost white
Blue eyes, not piercing, happy, kind

The start to the poem is, as other's have said very "listy". It's five lines of imagery all on the same thing, with nothing really connecting it, and no introduction to the story yet.

She invited me to her house

There was a problem with the
cupboard hinge

'Could I fix it?'

I didn't know how

Told her and her mother
'I was sorry'

Went home,
never went back

Always felt
I left something there
Intangible, irretrievable


We were 14 that year


Now, 60 days from 56th birthday,
it seems it happened
last week


Always act from the heart, pardner


What you do
never
leaves you

The rest of the poem is very mundane, which is probably what you were going for to sort of emphasise the passage of time. I think that mundane quality in a way takes a little bit away from the emotional power of the poem. This is just my opinion of course. All in all, it's not a bad poem and definitely worth an edit if you so desire.