Sharon Frost

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Pale, smooth, unblemished skin
Thin, straight nose line
Smiling, cupids bow lips

Hair so blonde it was almost white
Blue eyes, not piercing, happy, kind. Use a period after the word piercing.

She invited me to her house. Comma after house.

There was a problem with the
cupboard hinge

'Could I fix it?'

I didn't know how

Told her and her mother
'I was sorry'

Went home,
never went back

Always felt
I left something there
Intangible, irretrievable


We were 14 that year


Now, 60 days from 56th birthday,
it seems it happened
last week


Always act from the heart, pardner


What you do
never
leaves you

Nice poem, I would like to see more of your emotion coming out. There seems to be a lot of listing in your poem, you need to show the reader, take them on a journey of imagery.