Good Morning, Housemate

[Jim Steele]

hi Jim, spotted your feedback all over the place and it's a refreshing site indeedy thanks

the poem;'

it has a light hearted truth to it which makes it very likeable.
for me i'm not sure the rhyme scheme as it stands helps, though it starts off well and works well in some of the various verse, it could do with being constant, even if it's two rhyme schemes using alternating verse.
a suggest would be use a revolving 4 line 3 line format, or something that could lend to a wacky rhyme scheme.
i usually wake up happy and get grumpier as the day go on while all around me are grumpy bastards when they wake up

thanks for the read.

I’m not a nice guy and I don't give a toss,
Around the time I awake.
Unreasonable as my red-faced boss,
I snub like a pet shop snake.

I don't care
If it's not fair.
Turn that light off -
I can't stand the glare.

Don't turn on the light,
Don't tell me your thoughts,
Don't care what the news says today.

Don't care what you think.
This trash bag is full.
The coffee pot’s empty. Hooray.

Just leave me alone.
I really don't care.
Stay out of my way.
I'll get breakfast somewhere
On the way to my lousy job.

It's not lack of caffeine
That makes me so mean,
It's YOU.

Good morning.
Whatever.
Have a good one.
I'll see ya.

Maybe it's not that I'm grouchy when tired,
Maybe that's not a fair call.
Maybe I just can't be bothered quite yet
To pretend that I like you at all.

Thanks for the comments! The structure itself is something I didn't put as much thought into as I should have. At first I hardly noticed it, but the more I reread, the more I think it could use some attention.

Thanks a bunch for all the great advice, all - bit of work one afternoon, and I'll make this poem a bit more presentable and natural.