Holy Communion
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Nice. It's kind of obvious where it's going (excluding the last line), but none the worse for that. Some good images in the juxtapositions of events inside and outside the church. Balancing on the edge between narrative and poetic (for me).

A couple of typos: s1l1 s/fly's/flies and s7l3 s/statues/statue's
Overweening vanity :: sub-type poetry :: sub-type generic
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Holy Communion - by Keith - 09-24-2013, 07:38 AM
RE: Holy Communion - by Snags - 09-25-2013, 04:10 PM
RE: Holy Communion - by Keith - 09-26-2013, 08:02 AM



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