09-24-2013, 09:41 AM
(09-24-2013, 07:53 AM)Malu Wrote: Warmth of the sunI can see (from a previous comment) that you've made an edit on this. You could keep the original in the top post and just add your edit at the top of it, it makes it easier to compare them.
Story of the breeze
Melody of the sea
Whispers of the valley
Nurturing me
About the poem.. I feel there are to many "of the" in this short poem. For me, the poem would come to life more without the repetition. Mix up the lines a bit.
Just my personal opinion, for you to use or discard as you see fit.

