Eternal sentinels

[Keith]

Hi Keith,
think the edit has worked well and i am liking it even more.
So glad you did not take out the cardboard teddy bear. I came back looking for your post to ask you to think again about editing these detials as it was the small details that really made this work in the whole area / picture of grief and coping with loss to my read. (Also I remenber those teddy bear lace up things - they had them at primary school! The ones we had were one grade better than cardboard - sort of a fiber-board; the same stuff the peg boards were made of).

Great work. AJ.

Ha yes that fibre-board stuff was the one I was thinking of in this. Glad I left it in now. Thanks Keith

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There's something surprisingly masterful about this. I can't see changing it at all from the edit you have right now. I hate when people make me cry when I'm not expecting it....then again, I love it when they do.

Many thanks for the kind feedback bena its good to know the poem works like that, it got me as well when I wrote the last line. Thanks for taking the time. Best Keith