09-22-2013, 07:43 AM
(05-19-2013, 11:35 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:Having the last line also be the title gives it away. By all means stick with it, most songs are named for a line or significant word/phrase form it. I would just suggest making the last line more open to interpretation by changing it up a little, and possibly think of a more clever title. Hope this helps! Good poem and thanks for the readI am an addict
cheddar, stilton, emmental
my fix is cheeses.

